this is my frist story so i hope you like it

I am learning to write a well organised narrative.	SELF	Teacher
I have written an orientation that introduces setting, time and characters	yes	yes
I have a problem, resolution and ending	yes	yes
I have used sequencing words between events	yes	yes
I have written in past tense	yes	yes
My sentences make sense and I have correct punctuation - beginning and end	yes	yes
I have descriptive/figurative language	yes	some

One dark morning there lived four brothers. The boys were named Arama, Hohepa, Kaapua and Anthony. They lived a happy life for days , months and even years in an underground city.

Arama was the smartest.  Hohepa was the cheekiest.  Anthony was the strongest and Kaapua was the bravest. The boys enjoyed playing with mud and having mud wars.

There was one problem though.  They hated the dark.  They never saw light from the surface. Everyday they were  surrounded in darkness.  There was nobody to feed them or help them. They had to look after themselves.

One day Arama had an idea.  He thought that if they could dig a huge hole in the roof it can lead them up to the surface.  So they started digging.

“Dig dig Kaapua” Anthony said. Kaapua replied back “ok”.  Later on, Hohepa shouted to Kaapua as loud as an elephant, “hurry up you grandpa”.  Kaapua got angry so he took a big swing at Hohepa.  He missed which made Hohepa laugh.

“Quit playing around you two, we’ve got work to do” said Arama.The ground was shaking everyone froze.  Suddenly lava started blasting out of the top of the dirt everyone freaked out. Anthony made a taiaha and threw it in the hole and stopped the lava. Then they all climbed out of the darkness and into the beautiful light.they seen a beautiful family of angles so they followed them to heven